Archive for April 2010

The point is not that I was reading an article about Britney Spears

It’s not my fault. Someone I follow on twitter posted a link to the new, non-airbrushed photos of Britney Spears on the website of UK tabloid the Daily Mail. I had to look.

And while the photos/airbrushing –  and what they reveal about an industry that makes all teenage girls even more full of self-loathing than they would be otherwise – are tough to look at, what’s worse is the writing in the piece.

Exhibit A: The opening sentence

Celebrities and the industry around them is often accused of producing images that affect young people’s body image.

ACK! Celebrities and the industry around them are. ARE! And unless all young people share one body image, images should be plural. Yikes!

Exhibit B: The second sentence (You see where I’m going with this?)

Which is why it’s so refreshing to see one of the world’s most famous pop stars allowing all of their imperfections to be highlighted.

I will forgive the fact that the sentence starts with “which.” This is casual writing, being about celebrities and all, so it’s okay to be a bit chatty. But “their”? We already know the article is about Britney, so the lame excuse of needing a gender-neutral pronoun can’t even be used. Try “her” instead.

Anyway, I can take no more. But the photos are interesting, and if you’re at all intrigued, you can have a peek here.

Comprises or comprised of?

Ever wondered which is correct, “comprises” or “comprised of”? Here’s a great blog post from Everything Language and Grammar that explains why “comprised of” is wrong better than any I’ve seen:

Comprised of Errors

Enjoy!