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Watch your loaded language

Besides the terrible image quality (my fault — no proper camera nearby), what’s wrong with this ad for a Clarins free gift promotion at Sears?

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While it is nice that the promotion allows you to choose one of four different skin-care sets, the phrase “right to choose” is entirely inappropriate here.

Why? It’s loaded language. It’s a phrase that — like it or not — references a woman’s right to choose to have an abortion. That thought will enter the mind of almost every person who reads the ad. Perhaps no one told the ad writers at Sears that abortion isn’t an issue they should allude to in their copy.

I’m all for cheeky word play and clever pop-culture referencing. Done well, it can make an ad for a dull product sparkle. But make sure the cultural reference you make is appropriate, unless you’re specifically trying to stir up controversy.

 

 

 

This was written by Christina. Posted on Monday, January 5, 2009, at 11:10 pm. Filed under Cautionary tales, Scary reads. Bookmark the permalink. Follow comments here with the RSS feed. Both comments and trackbacks are currently closed.

One Comment

  1. Aimee wrote:

    I saw that ad at the Bay today, and couldn’t believe my eyes. Would a giant retailer get away with an ad that says “I have a dream–of products that are judged by how they feel on my skin.” No, they wouldn’t. I want to know what hack ad agency did this.

    I found your blog by googling “Clarins” + “Right to choose.” I knew other people would be as irritated as I was about these ads, and I’m frankly surprised there aren’t more posts about this.

    Sunday, January 18, 2009 at 9:22 pm | Permalink
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